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March 30, 2008

An attempt at working both this week’s prompts ‘Torrid’ & ‘The Gamble’ at Writer’s Island – Discovered via Chennai Ramblings. [Do check her blog out, cos she writes beautifully!]

Tried writing in a Fibonacci sequence, but changed my mind mid-way and did a natural number progression instead. It’s slightly abrupt but here goes.


Porcelain trances
A pulsating orgy
Of dangerously dancing flames
Hot cornets and torrid rhythms
Amid fervent voices chanting in sync
Lurking ominously, shadows stretch long and thin
Eyes dart, perched on a Shea tree, waiting
Too late. Foreboding peaks, you realize it’s a gamble
You can never take, an escape you can never make.

Partially inspired by Roots, one of my most favourite books.

16 Comments leave one →
  1. March 30, 2008 3:35 PM

    nice…you seem to have been thinking of two opposite things at the same time…and a little bit confused as to what it will come out as…i mean sure of the message but not of the order to write…

  2. March 30, 2008 6:24 PM

    Thanks for the compliment πŸ™‚
    And good that you have entered Writer’s Island too!
    I love this one, a natural progression is a great idea for this prompt!

  3. March 30, 2008 6:44 PM

    That’s true. It was a little hard for me to streamline the thoughts and keep the meter as well. Hence, the abruptness I already mentioned. πŸ™‚ Thanks for dropping by!

    Anytime! πŸ˜€

    I love this one, a natural progression is a great idea for this prompt!
    Yay! I’m dying to write something in your Fibonacci, though. Neat idea, that!

  4. March 30, 2008 9:26 PM

    whoa! way to go girl! this is really nice!!

  5. March 30, 2008 9:35 PM

    πŸ˜€ Thanks a mil!

  6. March 31, 2008 7:04 AM

    Hi there You accomplished getting both torrid and gamble into a very well written poem great job.

  7. March 31, 2008 8:44 AM

    Thank you so much! πŸ™‚

  8. March 31, 2008 10:55 AM

    anytime! πŸ˜€

  9. March 31, 2008 9:08 PM

    Welcome to writer’s island.
    “an escape you can never make”.. this caught any many gambles we take are the ones from which there is no escape..worth thinking about

  10. March 31, 2008 9:59 PM

    Thank you. πŸ™‚ As for gambles and escapes, I didn’t quite think of it like you say, but yours is an interesting perspective!

  11. April 1, 2008 12:24 AM

    Suraksha, Suraksha, I love the way you play with words…

  12. April 1, 2008 4:31 AM

    a beautiful picture you have painted with words

  13. April 1, 2008 5:14 AM

    Hee, thanks! πŸ˜€

    Thank you. πŸ™‚ Keep dropping in!

  14. April 2, 2008 7:56 AM

    Lovely imagery!

  15. April 2, 2008 5:32 PM

    Thank you πŸ™‚

  16. April 3, 2008 11:24 PM

    This was interesting, an dthe sequence too…
    Writer’s is addictive , so get ready for the ride πŸ™‚

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