Hallucinations
2008 March 30
An attempt at working both this week’s prompts ‘Torrid’ & ‘The Gamble’ at Writer’s Island – Discovered via Chennai Ramblings. [Do check her blog out, cos she writes beautifully!]
Tried writing in a Fibonacci sequence, but changed my mind mid-way and did a natural number progression instead. It’s slightly abrupt but here goes.
Hallucinations
Moonlight
Porcelain trances
A pulsating orgy
Of dangerously dancing flames
Hot cornets and torrid rhythms
Amid fervent voices chanting in sync
Lurking ominously, shadows stretch long and thin
Eyes dart, perched on a Shea tree, waiting
Too late. Foreboding peaks, you realize it’s a gamble
You can never take, an escape you can never make.
Partially inspired by Roots, one of my most favourite books.
nice…you seem to have been thinking of two opposite things at the same time…and a little bit confused as to what it will come out as…i mean sure of the message but not of the order to write…
Thanks for the compliment
And good that you have entered Writer’s Island too!
I love this one, a natural progression is a great idea for this prompt!
@iamvisheshur:
Thanks for dropping by!
That’s true. It was a little hard for me to streamline the thoughts and keep the meter as well. Hence, the abruptness I already mentioned.
@CR:
Anytime!
I love this one, a natural progression is a great idea for this prompt!
Yay! I’m dying to write something in your Fibonacci, though. Neat idea, that!
whoa! way to go girl! this is really nice!!
@Shills:
Thanks a mil!
Hi there You accomplished getting both torrid and gamble into a very well written poem great job.
@Jadey:
Thank you so much!
anytime!
Welcome to writer’s island.
“an escape you can never make”.. this caught any eye..how many gambles we take are the ones from which there is no escape..worth thinking about
@Rambler:
As for gambles and escapes, I didn’t quite think of it like you say, but yours is an interesting perspective!
Thank you.
Suraksha, Suraksha, I love the way you play with words…
a beautiful picture you have painted with words
@Sharan:
Hee, thanks!
@OneMoreBeliever:
Keep dropping in!
Thank you.
Lovely imagery!
@TumbleWords:
Thank you
This was interesting, an dthe sequence too…
Writer’s is addictive , so get ready for the ride